SPEEDING FINES
SPEEDING: ROAD TO DEATH
Speeding has been always a fun for all of us. most of us enjoy speeding. But there is one more thing that speeding is one of the main reason for many accidents on global level. In Thailand, 2761 accidents took place in five days, and approximately 30% were caused by speeding.
everybody is busy in today's fast paced world but the thing is to cover up that time we put our life at risk by speeding more. our govt. should take some action against this; and one of these actions could be by Increasing the speeding fines. this will definitely reduce the speeding crimes and accidents as people would have to pay for putting their life at danger and no one wants to get some extra burden on their pocket.
the fines in BC are already so high and making them higher would put more pressure on people making it so hard to pay the ticket and thus everyone will think twice before speeding up.
pic by: Mislav Marohnić
Speeding has been always a fun for all of us. most of us enjoy speeding. But there is one more thing that speeding is one of the main reason for many accidents on global level. In Thailand, 2761 accidents took place in five days, and approximately 30% were caused by speeding.
everybody is busy in today's fast paced world but the thing is to cover up that time we put our life at risk by speeding more. our govt. should take some action against this; and one of these actions could be by Increasing the speeding fines. this will definitely reduce the speeding crimes and accidents as people would have to pay for putting their life at danger and no one wants to get some extra burden on their pocket.
the fines in BC are already so high and making them higher would put more pressure on people making it so hard to pay the ticket and thus everyone will think twice before speeding up.
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Headline: i choose the headline including words speeding and death as these are searched more than the words speeding and fines. obviously death is seen as an interesting topic to be read upon.
The links you provided help backup your argument. There are some grammar and spelling mistakes.
ReplyDeleteYou picked a very controversial topic to write about, and I think some of your points were good things we should all consider. Your links were helpful and informative. The blog was quite short, so I think you could have developed your thoughts and argument further.
ReplyDeleteIt was a bit short, but you made some good points. I like your choice of pictures.
ReplyDeleteYour argument made a lot of good points for increasing speeding fines, and your use of images helped to illustrate your points. While there were some minor errors to do with spelling and grammar, your argument is still strong and persuasive.
ReplyDeleteThe post was rather short and I really wish you made it longer because your points were great. Also the fact you included global statistics was really cool. The images were great resources and they suited the topic really well.
ReplyDeleteI really wish you had more points and examples, being someone who disagrees with fines being higher I would have loved to gotten more information on other aspects of speeding and even the fining system rather than just that speeding causes accidents. The lack of jargon is super nice because I know little to nothing on how the fining system actually works and there can be complicated terms in any form of law enforement. Taking an international view was also super interessting.
ReplyDeleteI wish your argument was longer! It’s a pretty interesting topic to me so I wish you would’ve elaborated at bit more. I think the links you provided where helpful. The grammar errors where distracting.
ReplyDeleteI liked the arguments you make in this essay. There are some spelling and grammar errors, and I do wish that you could have elaborated more in some spots. Otherwise, your arguments are well stated.
ReplyDeletefirst of all the topic is so interesting and by giving solid arguments so made it more strong and i completely agree with your points but to a few extent i didn't like the picture you gave like you could get a better picture than this as to some extent it affects your essay
ReplyDeleteThe points you have made are great, but your argument would have been stronger if you elaborated more and provided more evidence. Also it would be good to proofread, tighten up your grammar and spelling to help make the argument clear and easier to read.
ReplyDeleteI like your post however you could have made it longer. There is a lot of information that you can use to backup your argument. Also the picture you used could be a little bit better. But good job on the post, i totally agree with everything you said. Good Job.
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